part one, page two

Cool, I was wondering when the next part of this would come out. Only seen two pages so far of course, but so far so good. And considering how good all of the remixes and ideas in the “Reasons Why I Should Write…” posts have been, I’ve got faith that we won’t be the least bit disappointed.

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I was initially bugged by the expositional dialogue, feeling as if it was one of those instances of a character telling another character something they should already know just for the sake of the reader, but then I went back and refreshed my memory of page one and realized that the gentleman giving the orders may have never been aboard this ship before and that Sarjand is a bit of a braggart.

So… Yes…. Well played, sir.

Beyond that, Davinder’s style is a good fit so far and I’m excited to see how the art progresses as the story unfolds.

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YAY.

Random thing: wouldn’t it make more sense in context as “we are the threat” and not “we are the threat“? (Like, “We can’t be threatened, we are the threat.”) Who decides the italicizing of the text- the artist or the writer?

@Cookie McCool: What is your deal with kittens?

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